Sunday, October 16, 2011

SampleSunday: Letters of the Dead (Beginning, Part 1)

I'm falling behind on my schedule of getting Letters of the Dead grammar-edited and formatted, so I hope doing #SampleSunday starting from the beginning will force me to work harder, work more.  So, this is still a work-in-progress.

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Snippet from Letters of the Dead, a work-in-progress fantasy novel, by Jodi Ralston:

    For someone who received letters from the dead, I was quite the coward at opening the living's mail, or rather, opening mail from home.  Currently, the week-old letter occupied my pocket, out of sight, but not far enough from mind now that I had finished making my aunt's pills.  Even without letter before me, I could see my sister's handwriting.  I could imagine her at the writing desk, smiling despite each word.  I could imagine my brother leaning over her shoulder, investing himself in each line she penned, speaking loudly with or without a single word--so loudly that even oceans away I could hear, ringing in my ear, his censure and disappointment for his errant little brother.

    No.  No, the letter and home was never far enough from mind.  Things of mixed emotion rarely were. 

    I pulled off my work gloves and set them beside the pill box painted like a red flower.  Inside it were the pills I had made.  I picked up the container, a little too harshly it turned out.  The opium-mix pills, covered up in pretty shells like pink candy, rattled inside.  Far from innocent but pain didn't bear such considerations in mind.  Pain was a fire, burning where it would.  Sometimes these little pills offered the only help left.

    I stood up, pills rattling, ready to take them upstairs to Mrs. E's bedroom so Mr. E didn't have to.

    But circumstances conspired so I did not have to yet: Mr. E stood in the doorway linking kitchen to the mixing room.  How much had he witnessed?  The smile on my uncle's face said, Not much.  That smile was like a warm day in a long winter, not common enough.  That smile was more than enough to wipe away earlier thoughts and to bring better in their stead.

    "Son," he whispered as he placed the letter beside my discarded gloves on the worktable.  "You meet more misses at funerals than most find at dances."

    A miss?  It must be a dead letter.  Like the postmen, Mr. E saw what the deceased wanted casual outsiders to see: directions to me and my location, not to where the deceased intended me to go.  That didn't stop others from seeing the actual return address.

    "With such luck," Mr. E was saying, "maybe I should hire myself out to mourning as well."

    Then he seemed to remember the real recipient of his josh laid abed upstairs.  Worse, he saw the unintentional morbidity and portent in his words: he sank in on himself as he stood there, hiding his apprehension by stroking his mustache.  You had to look closely or share familiarity to notice that the mustache--more grey than blonde now--had grown as thin as his voice.

    He needed distraction.  "Mr. Elandris?"  I picked topic mundane.  "What do I owe you for the postage?"  I touched his sleeve.  "Sir?" 

    "Eh?  Oh.  Oh, yes.  Don't bother yourself about it.  Did you finish the scripts?"

    "Yes."  But he didn't refer to the customers.  "Yes." 

    He took the pill box from me.  Opened the lid.  Counted the week's worth of medicine, all twenty-eight--doubled from last month.  But he didn't see pills: he was seeing symptoms and a cure-all for the incurable migraines that led to attacks . . . that might lead, someday, to another stroke. 

    I saw not a cure at all.

    Morbid, Roderis.  Morbid.

    "No, son," Mr. E said, as he closed the lid.  "You go on."  He turned from me.  "I can handle any arrivals and appointments without my assistant for the afternoon."

    But I preferred he wouldn't be alone.  "Is Miss . . . "  What was the latest maid-of-all-work's name?  They turned over so quickly.  "Is the maid coming in?"

    "No."  A tightness had entered his eyes and grip.  "She worried Mrs. E's nerves."

    Few were the reasons for dismissal in this household.  One being too present, too noisy, distressing Mrs. E's sensitive ears and triggering her headaches.  The other being talks on things the Elandrises rather strongly wished they wouldn't.  If I recalled correctly, despite my best advice, the maid had a passion for the non-human slaves, the Possessions.

    "But they are only myth--"  I had said once when the dinner table sat three, not two.  And Mr. E let nothing more be said.  Not even that much would be tolerated now.

    "Sir, we can look in the ads for a new help tonight, if you want?  Or perhaps," I said, hoping he would take a nudge of advice, "we could invite . . . "  The nearest relations lived in the country, and even if one cousin were in town, they were too full of sympathy and a caution to accept an invite.  But maybe it wouldn't be so for others.  "We could invite your friend, the one apprenticed the year before you at your master's.  I've seen him and his wife several times now; they must have moved closer.  I'm sure they would welcome renewing your acquaintance in person rather than over letter?"  More than that, Mr. E could use some fresh companionship and Mrs. E could do with some careful, mindful same.  "He might be able to offer a good recommendation, besides."

    "Perhaps. . . .  You go on now, son."  His voice was half-here, half-up-there with Mrs. E, even before he turned away.  "We'll be fine."  He tiptoed out of sight.

    Nudge not taken, but perhaps his friend could be found and a conversation struck up, steps taken to bring change into his household.  Change for the better.

    But for now, I was left with letters.  The new one, at least, I could do some good . . .

    I picked it up off the work table, and a name stared up at me.  Poole.

    . . . or maybe I could not.

    A miss had directed this letter to an Honorable Beatris Poole.  Poole was common enough a name.  Surely, it need not be tied in any way to the late Baron Poole.  Surely.

    Yet.

    Yet, after almost a year of receiving the dead's letters, I had developed intuition.  Or rather, my scarred fingers had, fretting over the name without command from my consciousness.  Mr. E had his tic; I had my own.

    Rarely had I opened a dead letter here, in this place, in this home.  Not so much a superstition as a desire to keep lives separate, like the partition that divided kitchen from mixing room, home from work, the recovering Mrs. E from the succumbed baron, the living from the dead.  But hadn't the boundaries already been crossed?

    Crossed just over a year ago.

    By a single train wreck that had scarred both of their lives--and so many more.

    I held the letter, considering that.

    I held it, knowing superstition held me back--but I would not read all of the letter here.  I just needed to see.

    I cracked the red seal--never quite sure who re-pressed that wax.  The dead?  Or the soul's conductor, the psychopomp who directed--or rather, misdirected--their mail to me?

    Focus, Roderis.  Deep breath.

    I opened the letter.  Over the original letter, the post-mortem script read:

    BARON POOLE.




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Sunday, October 9, 2011

SampleSunday: Letters of the Dead: Roderis Meeting Malanye

I heard about #samplesunday on the Writer's Cafe on the Kindleboards and read more about it here.  This Sunday I decided to join in.  Some setup.  Letters of the Dead is currently undergoing grammar edits (haven't reached this section yet) and will be my first self-published ebook once done.  The main character (narrator) Roderis receives letters from the dead, sent by the psychopomp (a conductor of souls).  Roderis has received one from Miss Poole's father, Baron Poole, but is confused about what the baron wants.  Roderis is disguise as a hired mourner.


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Snippet from Letters of the Dead, a work-in-progress fantasy novel, by Jodi Ralston:



We had arrived, the butler showing me into the mourning room.

I almost believed one of us were mistaken until I saw the open casket near the wall.  By it stood a Corvish gentleman of black hair.  He was dressed in even more somber black, arms folded behind his back.  I hadn't time to ask of his identity; the butler was already gone.  The casket and a griever might be here, but seeing the state of this room, I didn't believe a psychopomp miracle or my help would be welcome here.

Gaslights blazed about the room instead of grey candles.  Not a pinch of funerary incense burned to soften the scent of preservative magic in this room.  Uncovered furniture crowded the space.  And not a single picture paid vigil over the deceased much less the room; in fact, if any of the lady of the house once graced this room, they had found a new place.  However, the worst lack lived on here as it did elsewhere: the absence of grey.  Nothing on the door, window, curtains, furniture, casket, anywhere--

No, wait, there were specks of grey on the gentleman.  On the scant trimmings of his dress coat's sleeves, on the waistcoat, and on the knee breeches.  I had overlooked it at first, the almost Colonial style mourning in the Motherland.

Who was he?  A more congenial survivor of the dead?  Colonial?  But really, his clothing's style didn't wash as my home country's, too many details out of place.  So I pushed that distraction from mind, and focused on other details.  Such as, he didn't appear interested in me, hadn't even looked up.  Was he one of the body's escorts?  One of the baron's guards?  Last I heard, he had one for every corner of every room and matched them to the decor.  But even baron wouldn't dress them this well, would he?  Or like . . . this?  Surely, he still remembered his homeland's mourning colors.

Either way, this gentleman could mourn albeit subtly.

Why?

He must be involved.  And in view of the statement of this room, this denial of a man's last rites, where hate colored the walls instead of grief, I believed I knew why the letter had sent me here: I needed to make sure the Honorable Miss Beatris Poole received the message the deceased most wanted to impart: regret and love.  Simple as a delivery and just as hard.  The gentleman's presence hinted that it wasn't impossible.  Whoever he was, he was important to Miss Poole and trusted by the baron.  He was likely this Mr. Mal'a'nye from the letter.

A bit reality from a scribbled mess of confusion.

Someone to bridge the chasm between parent and child, or to bandage the wound.  A welcome hand of help, either way.

Time to accept it and do what I came here for.  I moved toward the gentleman and coffin.  But after a few steps, I smelled the preservative magic, and although my lungs did not try to close, my mouth and stomach burned.  If anyone knew what that magicum tasted like on the return. . . . I dabbed with my sleeve at my mouth, but didn't leave it pressed there.  Not a good idea to give offense.

At least . . . at least Miss Poole had done that much, probably more for her own nose rather than for her father's benefit.  Without a doubt, she had not ingested the magic opiates and cast that spell herself.

Good for her.  Bad for the ready-makers she purchased it from.

Morbid, Roderis.

I cleared my throat, but the gentleman didn't even look at me.  Maybe he wouldn't, not until he heard what I had to say, us being strangers and, obviously, of different circles.

Though no one else waited in this room, I edged as close as I dared to the gentleman, moving past the slight swim of the head until a heaviness threatened my lungs.  At the center of the room, I could move no more.  Too much magic and too much powdered magic opium added to fuel the preservative.

No further.  I had to trust I was close enough that my words would move him.  "E-excuse me, sir--"  I coughed and rubbed my head.  "Sir, I--that is, you are . . . Mr. Mal . . a . . .nye?"

His head turned at that.  "Yes, I am, Owner."  

I stared.  Owner?  He had called me--no--I must have--I misheard.  Possessions, they weren't real.

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In case you were wondering, a Possession is an enslaved being with great magical power that is different than the magic most humans use.

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Tuesday, September 27, 2011

Update: One Who Sees

It is official.  I have pulled One Who Sees, my mythic fantasy novella; it will not be published with Drollerie Press after all.  I have mixed feelings about it, but we parted on good terms, so there is that.  But I am behind schedule on Letters of the Dead, my first short fantasy novel that I plan to self-e-publish.  So, I cannot work on OWS yet.  It still needs one edit pass, a proof, formatting into ebook with cover, and one final look-see-over.  I hope to get it up mid-November, though.  Just as I hope to get LotD up by either Halloween or, more likely, by October 8.  I do know that when I get OWS up, I'll briefly post it for free on this blog.  Briefly meaning it should go down in January.

It's a plan, anyway.    

Monday, September 19, 2011

Update: Letters of the Dead

After a sick break and pre-nano distractions, I am finally back on track with my novel, Letters of the Dead.  I hope to finish my current touch-up tomorrow, and then take a brief break to work on test formatting that novelette I was talking about.  Still haven't heard word from the e-publishers, though.  So, I don't expect to get it done for my birthday after all, but I will check up with them then.  But it will be good practice to format that piece as an ebook.  So that covers Wednesday, Thursday, and Friday.

Friday, however, I will also resume working on LotD.  It will be a pure read-through, just to make sure it is indeed ready for the grammar pass scheduled to start this weekend.  After that, I'll use what I learned from formatting practice on the novelette and begin formatting LotD.  One last proof in that format, then it should be ready to upload on Halloween.

So, though it might be a tight deadline, I can still make it.  And I will be glad when it is done.  Just this year alone, since I decided to focus on this novel as my first ebook, I've clocked over 80 hours on its revisions.  But the novel is so much better for it.

Wednesday, September 7, 2011

Update: The One Who Sees

Due to unfortunate circumstances, The One Who Sees will not be published with Drollerie Press.  Yesterday, I had to email them about cancelling the contract I have with them.  I believe in signs, the novelette wasn't going to be ready to publish by its two year anniversary of acceptance/contract signing, and so I think God was telling me to move on.  I'm going to give it a week, and if I don't hear back, I'll try another contact at the publishers.  But I hope to make this my first self-published work.  In fact, I would like to try an experiment and post it for free on my blog while I work on getting it uploaded, and then leave it up for a while in celebration of my first successful upload.  My goal date?  My birthday, Sept 25.  Keep your fingers crossed.

Thursday, September 1, 2011

Mother Goose is Dead Anthology (Ebook version) is Now up for Sale


The ebook version is live now, on its own page at Damnation Books.  Right now the price is marked down from $6.95 to 75 cents a variable discount that changes, but that is only for the first 24 hours, which started at midnight Wednesday.  So far, from the proof copy, it looks great, full of interesting reads spanning over 112,692 words.  Wow :-)

Anyway, a print version is coming and so are ebooks on the different vendor sites like Kindle and B&N (and more).

Enjoy all.  

Monday, July 25, 2011

GWESPE: Two Lessons Well Learned

The Grand Sophy 

Lesson #1:  Pick a work that you can finish quickly and will keep you actively engaged no matter what.  This way, if you have the attention span of a flea with ADHD, you are less likely to raise the white flag and move on to some other project you won't finish ;-)

Lesson #2:   To perk up flagging interest, read reference works or fiction that serves as such for your work.  This way, when you get obsessed with others' works, you can at least mollify yourself that "it's research."

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Been a while since I was checked in.  Wish I could say I was busy writing up a storm this whole time, but I wasn't.   Last week, over a period of 5 days, I read four Georgette Heyer novels (hence lesson #2).  Though I have to admit, I do pick up research by immersion.  That is, I've caught myself saying a few things that sounded positively . . . Regencyish ;-)  Better yet, I picked up a few tidbits to put into my Regency/Victorianish time-swamp of a novel.

But this is my last week of work at the college before a three-week break.  I've committed myself to getting half my writing and editing related work done during this time.

However, I don't expect to do much work on my novel this week yet, due two major changes:  we adopted a dog and we are renovating the basement's floor.  The first is problematic because we have other dogs, and this new one is a young poodle.  Which means hyper, hyper, hyper.  (Pictures coming soon, and maybe a video if I can train him to jump into my arms from the floor.) The second's problems began Friday, because everything has to be removed from the room, and as a writer, I'm not afraid to say I am terribly addicted to books.  Finally, unrelated to the above reasons .... I'm stilling reading Georgette Heyer, but at least my ardure has faded to a mere tendre for the books.

Oh, and to close up this post and just because, here is the list of my four diversions from last week:

  1. Charity Girl
  2. Lady of Quality
  3. Sylvester
  4. The Grand Sophy

Of which, the last one was the best.